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The original post was saved but now we will just work on our breast haikus.

 

Well, for starters, the intelligent know how to spell "supremacy" properly

Not exactly sure what the quote is supposed to mean, but it sounds good - quite Confucian

 

A good quote makes an instant point clear, or shows a deeper meaning. And unless the fault is mine, I can't seem to find either...

 

I agree.

If people are intelligent, they don't concern themselves with supremacy or revolution, but change things from the inside. You're emplying people are dumb and should be clever. It contains a lot of big words and is the right length but it doesn't really mean much.

 

Not to mention that it appears contradictory. Doesn't intelligence imply a form of supremacy? Now some of the best sayings (particularly Zen proverbs) concern paradoxes, but that is not the same as contradicting yourself. You need to emphasise the contradiction, the paradox is the whole point. As it is, it just seems confused.

Furthermore, good sayings are elegant: they make a point succinctly. The whole "do likewise, follow a revolution" (another contradiction, by the way; isn't a revolution about not following the norm?) is superfluous.

A more succinct, elegant way of making your point would be: "Intelligence is not superior thinking; it is humble understanding".

 

Also, wouldn't causing a revolution be wanting that the said person to become supreme over the current regime?

 

Another good point. A saying/slogan that results in too many distracting questions and inherent contradictions is just confusing garble.

Not pissing on the point you are making, hydro_electric_655, but the way it is put is too clumsly and awkward to catch on as a saying.

 

i made one up accidently the other day

"mr shirt, well he really does have some creases to iron out"

 

i'm better known for impromptu poetry


boobies are good
boobies are great
they make me salivate

 

Shakespeare has nothing on you, Cderalow.

 

Yeah, but it works better as a haiku:

Domes of soft promise
a high as unreachable
as a mountain range

 

Sorry Nexxo, I love your haiku's, but Cderalow one's has more of that patented instant boobie gratification talk.

 

Nice one again Nexxo - shame I don't have a talent for creating Haiku's.

 

Genius, my good sir.
Ever thought of publishing that through some well known poetic journals? (I know none.)

 

Bouncing boobie breasts
with big round soft nipples will
get you to read this

 

*considers whether to read repeatedly or hit the report post button *

 

Thread title re-named appropriately.

Golden Valley
Between two soft mounds
Pleasure ensues

Damnit, I don't think I can do Haikus. And re-reading it doesn't necessarily mean boobs EDIT: It's even unisex!

 

Your composition is 4-5-4 syllables, whereas haiku are traditionally 5-7-5 syllables (actually Japanese morae, which only partially correspond to the syllables of languages such as English).

Keep in mind that haikus are some sort of humourous, melancholy, awe-inspired or life-affirming observation of life at the microcosmic level. It also contains a special season word (the kigo) descriptive of the season in which it is set. While traditional hokku focused on nature and the place of humans in nature, modern haiku poets often consider any subject matter suitable, whether related to nature, an urban setting, or even a technological context. While old haiku avoided some topics such as romance, sex (I guess that's where we went wrong, then), and overt violence, contemporary haiku often deals specifically with such themes.

Haiku often combine two (or rarely, three) different elements into a unified sensory impression, with a major grammatical break (kire) usually at the end of either the first five or second seven morae. But I have a life so I tend to stick to the free-form Haiku.

A re-write of Bindi's haiku:

A valley of warmth
between the soft mounds of which
pleasure lies waiting

 

Big beautiful breasts
heaving up and down on her
hypnotizing me

 

Hei, Wakarimashta Nexxo-Sensei.