Hi I have the choice of units for my next term and one in particular I really want to do which is design a brewary for whiskey I have to write 150 word paragraph for it. I would be gratefull if someone could maybe check what I have written and suggest improvements. Thank you
Whisky is made in a distillery btw. I think you should do a bit of reading about the history of whisky and its production as your pitch below sounds like a Glen Morangie advert and your basic knowledge of the subject sounds lacking. I'm also confused. Are you wanting to design a distillery or design a place to drink whisky? Do you know why distillery's are located where they are?
Distilleries (in particular the actual stills) tend to be quite particular in their shape and placement (speak to a process engineer, they can probably describe it better). So in terms of that, you don't have too many options. I'd suggest visiting a few distilleries (many of them provide tours all year round and aren't too expensive) and including that fact into your pitch, it will show that you're very keen on the idea and have done some research beforehand as well.
Just so you know, if you're writing to anyone in or from Scotland never, and I mean never, put an 'e' in whisky.
Sorry guys prob should have pointed out its a place that makes whisky but I am not involved with any technical detailing about distillarys etc. Its about experiancing a space where it is made and consumed
You don't drink whisky at a distillery. That'd be the equivalent of going to a dairy to put milk in your tea.
So you're basically telling your tutor you want to design a distillery so you can drink more whisky? The worst way to start your proposal would be to state that you want to do it because you like whisky. (Drinking whisky and your enjoyment of it is more than anything likely to be detrimental to your work output!!) This is waffle. There is no experience behind the act of drinking whisky. Drinking is the act and thus it is experienced. This should be higher on the agenda though I would steer clear of the phrases "conjures up images" and "exciting to explore" (I never found any of my projects exciting - interesting, challenging or thought provoking perhaps). How about something along the lines of "Initial ideas I would like to explore are the sensations of shelter, warmth and comfort associated with traditional rural Scottish inns and how this can be transposed into an urban context." ... something like "An avenue of investigation I would pursue is, not only the relationship between light and space (or darkness and seclusion), but also aromas"? - I'm not entirely sure how you would investigate this but i'd be happy to discuss. Any project can be steered towards a more conceptual approach or vice versa, I wouldn't explicitly say that you wanted to be less conceptual. "Feel of a place" is conceptual afterall Similar to how you started your proposal. I would condense it rather than reiterate it. ... I'd be happy to discuss further if you like. I studied dual honours architecture and structural engineering myself, now working in engineering (- if it matters.)
My Great Great Great Grandad built the Glenfiddich. If you have any questions about the whisky manufacturing process or Glenfiddich/Balvenie/Kninvie I'd be happy to answer them. (Also, the Glenfiddich officially has the best loos in Scotland).
This sounds like a great chance to plug my Dad's Whisky Podcast, The Malted Muse! http://www.themaltedmuse.com/ (his web design skills are a work in progress) Also, you need to work on the punctuation of your pitch to your tutor. That's terrible.
And I am that said Dad - I think this is a good idea and some things have been said that need to be unsaid. - You can have a brewary for making whisky as some distilleries will work in partnership with a brewary who make the wash that they use - some, in fact most, make their own. However, you seem to mean a distillery. There are a number of people/places to look at such as Delme Evans, Bruichladdich distillery, St Georges Distillery and Annandale distillery (which is still in the planning stages and would be asking many of the questions you are asking), Also look at specialist whisky bars of which there are many and could be found in whisky magazine or at scotch.net. Drinking whisky is not just drinking it most definitly is an experience - any one who says different is not doing it right. Different whiskies hold different experiences and you might want to consider a specific whisky to work on - eg The Major who founded Glen Grant kept a bottle next to a waterfall as he felt the two went together. Some people at Bushmills hide whiskey on rope in the sea so they can drink it chilled on the coast etc. A good book is 'The Whisky Men' by Gavin D. Smith. My podcast is on itunes themaltedmuse podcast