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Discussion in 'General' started by hydro_electric_655, 1 Sep 2006.

  1. hydro_electric_655

    hydro_electric_655 Dremelly Dude

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    The original post was saved but now we will just work on our breast haikus.
     
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  2. Flibblebot

    Flibblebot Smile with me

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    Well, for starters, the intelligent know how to spell "supremacy" properly :wallbash:

    Not exactly sure what the quote is supposed to mean, but it sounds good - quite Confucian :p
     
  3. Glider

    Glider /dev/null

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    A good quote makes an instant point clear, or shows a deeper meaning. And unless the fault is mine, I can't seem to find either...
     
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    I agree.

    If people are intelligent, they don't concern themselves with supremacy or revolution, but change things from the inside. You're emplying people are dumb and should be clever. It contains a lot of big words and is the right length but it doesn't really mean much.
     
  5. Nexxo

    Nexxo Stopped treating this country as if it was my own.

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    Not to mention that it appears contradictory. Doesn't intelligence imply a form of supremacy? Now some of the best sayings (particularly Zen proverbs) concern paradoxes, but that is not the same as contradicting yourself. You need to emphasise the contradiction, the paradox is the whole point. As it is, it just seems confused.

    Furthermore, good sayings are elegant: they make a point succinctly. The whole "do likewise, follow a revolution" (another contradiction, by the way; isn't a revolution about not following the norm?) is superfluous.

    A more succinct, elegant way of making your point would be: "Intelligence is not superior thinking; it is humble understanding".
     
  6. Guest-16

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    Also, wouldn't causing a revolution be wanting that the said person to become supreme over the current regime?
     
  7. Nexxo

    Nexxo Stopped treating this country as if it was my own.

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    Another good point. A saying/slogan that results in too many distracting questions and inherent contradictions is just confusing garble.

    Not pissing on the point you are making, hydro_electric_655, but the way it is put is too clumsly and awkward to catch on as a saying.
     
  8. gbeeby

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    i made one up accidently the other day

    "mr shirt, well he really does have some creases to iron out"
     
  9. cderalow

    cderalow bondage master!

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    i'm better known for impromptu poetry


    boobies are good
    boobies are great
    they make me salivate
     
  10. Guest-16

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    Shakespeare has nothing on you, Cderalow.
     
  11. Nexxo

    Nexxo Stopped treating this country as if it was my own.

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    Yeah, but it works better as a haiku:

    Domes of soft promise
    a high as unreachable
    as a mountain range
     
  12. specofdust

    specofdust Banned

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    Sorry Nexxo, I love your haiku's, but Cderalow one's has more of that patented instant boobie gratification talk.
     
  13. Krikkit

    Krikkit All glory to the hypnotoad! Super Moderator

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    :hehe: Nice one again Nexxo - shame I don't have a talent for creating Haiku's.
     
  14. Ramble

    Ramble Ginger Nut

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    Genius, my good sir.
    Ever thought of publishing that through some well known poetic journals? (I know none.)
     
  15. Nexxo

    Nexxo Stopped treating this country as if it was my own.

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    Bouncing boobie breasts
    with big round soft nipples will
    get you to read this


    :D
     
  16. specofdust

    specofdust Banned

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    *considers whether to read repeatedly or hit the report post button :D :eek: :blush:*
     
  17. Guest-16

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    Thread title re-named appropriately.

    Golden Valley
    Between two soft mounds
    Pleasure ensues


    Damnit, I don't think I can do Haikus. And re-reading it doesn't necessarily mean boobs :eeek: EDIT: It's even unisex! :eeek:
     
  18. Nexxo

    Nexxo Stopped treating this country as if it was my own.

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    Your composition is 4-5-4 syllables, whereas haiku are traditionally 5-7-5 syllables (actually Japanese morae, which only partially correspond to the syllables of languages such as English).

    Keep in mind that haikus are some sort of humourous, melancholy, awe-inspired or life-affirming observation of life at the microcosmic level. It also contains a special season word (the kigo) descriptive of the season in which it is set. While traditional hokku focused on nature and the place of humans in nature, modern haiku poets often consider any subject matter suitable, whether related to nature, an urban setting, or even a technological context. While old haiku avoided some topics such as romance, sex (I guess that's where we went wrong, then), and overt violence, contemporary haiku often deals specifically with such themes.

    Haiku often combine two (or rarely, three) different elements into a unified sensory impression, with a major grammatical break (kire) usually at the end of either the first five or second seven morae. But I have a life so I tend to stick to the free-form Haiku. :p

    A re-write of Bindi's haiku:

    A valley of warmth
    between the soft mounds of which
    pleasure lies waiting
     
  19. bloodcar

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    Big beautiful breasts
    heaving up and down on her
    hypnotizing me
     
  20. Guest-16

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    Hei, Wakarimashta Nexxo-Sensei.
     

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